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Now THIS one I'm finally happy with the outcome. Model used from :iconmjranum-stock:.

This was extremely fun to do. Now I really know how to work my white charcoal. :D The photo isn't very good, but it's very difficult to get a good photo of black paper.

Tools Used:
White Charcoal Pencil
Pencil HB, 6B
Kneaded eraser
Black pastel paper

Time Taken:
About 2 1/2 hours. Yes, the shortest time I've spent on a drawing that I'm happy with in...years.

Critiques


:iconanjules:
Overall it looks great - the black paper, white charcoal definitely looks amazing. My only issue with the piece overall is the line of drops leading down her left side leg, and also the drops at the top of the umbrella. The drops on the umbrella seem too symmetrically placed (in the sense that they are the same distance from the umbrella) so it loses some 'realism' as drops wouldn't bounce off in such a uniform fashion. Similarly the rain coming off her leg seems too uniformly spaced from the body. With all that said, the detail of both her outfit and body is fantastic, particularly the shading (legs, shoulder blades etc).
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:iconfunkytoast:
nice! I really like the pose you placed her in

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:icondevabbi:
The shine on the shoes and her corset look great, as does the piece as a whole. Her posture and body language seem to be challenging the rain, and I like that. :) The umbrella's positioning and the rain surrounding it are top-notch.

If I had to critique anything, it'd be the fact that her legs have very little shape to them. I'd have to take another glance at the reference picture to judge the angle, but it looks like she doesn't have ankles or calves. Also, the shadow on her left shoulderblade seems a tad dark.

Overall excellent, :+fav:

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:iconduststorm10:
Thank you! :)

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:iconduststorm10:
Thank you very much! I see what you mean and you're right. It's kind of hard to work fine curves on such a rough paper but I'm getting better with it. :D

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:icondevabbi:
Oh I can imagine. That's why I prefer flatter paper, but charcoal needs something to cling to I suppose. :shrug:

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Well I don't know why I came here tonight
I got a feeling that something ain't right
Clowns to the left of me, jokers to the right
Here I am, stuck in the middle with you

~ Reservoir Dogs. :D ~
:iconhkn-hawk:
That's really cool and interesting :)
I have to get some white charcoal x)

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:iconduststorm10:
Thank you! I recommend it. It's very fun to work with! :D

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:iconhkn-hawk:
I bet it is :D
Have you used charcoal a long time?

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:iconduststorm10:
This is only my fourth try at using it. :P

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:iconrejectsocietyfx:
looks amazing brian :D

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March 31
1.9 MB
165 KB
600×809

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Camera Data

Canon
Canon PowerShot A590 IS
1/318 second
F/4.0
6 mm
80
Mar 31, 2009, 11:31:20 AM

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